User:Jinie Ham/Coffee in South Korea/Ayoung22 Peer Review

General info

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I am reviewing Jinie Ham's work.


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 * User:Jinie Ham/Coffee in South Korea
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Coffee in South Korea

Content
Jinnie added another section to the article called New Coffee. It included a subsection called Dalgona Coffee. This is relevant to the topic about coffee in South Korea.

Tone and Balance
The content added can be more neutral. The section has a lot of positive wording like, "...it was great for creating newly invented coffee at home during a pandemic." It also uses the word "you" often. The wording can be less personal.

Sourcing and References
The new content does not have sourcing. It would be helpful to have articles that mention how dalgona coffee started to trend on social media during the pandemic. The links to dalgona work.

Organization
The new content is easy to read, but there are some parts where wording could flow better and some grammatical errors.

Edit for Dalgona Coffee Section
Dalgona Coffee

Dalgona is a traditional Korean candy made with sugar and baking soda. But in Dalgona Coffee, instead of the hard candy, the Dalgona whip cream, made with Americano with sugar, is put on top of a glass of milk of one's choice. Dalgona Coffee was newly invented by the people during the COVID-19 pandemic. Due to the pandemic situation, and lockdown of the cities and countries, people had to time at home and reduce time being outside. In South Korea, quarantine is for fourteen days for a positive COVID result. During a time with little to do at home, people created Dalgona coffee. Dalgona coffee was very popular during the pandemic because of the lengthy time it took to mix Americano and sugar one thousand times or more. People started to do the ‘Dalgona coffee challenge’ and posted it on social media. This went viral all over Korea and widespread attention. After the pandemic, many coffee shops launched Dalgona coffee as one of the menu items.