User:Jiyenita/Deddy Corbuzier/Mariana Madera Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jiyenita


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Jiyenita/Deddy Corbuzier


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Deddy Corbuzier

Evaluate the drafted changes
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The adds you made to this article has improved the article tremendously, before it was very minimal and you were able to add just a few things to make the lead become more clear and structured. The lead as a whole is concise, well organized and the content is all relevant. However one thing i would add as its own section is a YouTube section especially now that YouTube is his main platform. The tone and balance of your edits are neutral and all ideas are equally represented which benefits the article. I believe the picture that is used is fine to use, but if there was a section about his family you should try and add a picture of his family so the article can be a little more personal. One of the main things you added to this page was that he wrote, directed and starred in the action film, Triangle the dark side which was a good add but you also backed it up with a reliable source. Overall, i think your edits have been very beneficial and if you were looking for more ideas for other sections, maybe try sections about his family and YouTube.