User:Jjohns34/Dance music/Bubbalicious82 Peer Review

General info
(provide username) Jjohns34
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
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 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jjohns34/Dance_music?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_templ
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Dance music
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Dance music

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

At the onset of this review it is important to point out that there is a request on the Talk page for Dance music to merge the article with another article entitled, Electronic dance music. Talk:Electronic dance music

I highly recommend reviewing the Talk:Dance music section. A number of good suggestions can be found.

I feel the 1st paragraph is not a straight forward. It creates a level of ambiguity and does not layout a clear definition of dance music(i.e. is it a well defined genre or popular culture music that changes with each generation) and purpose of the article is lost. It contains historic information that would be better placed in subsequent paragraphs.

I personally feel the picture that is describing Dance Music is distracting and should be changed or removed. It does not add to the value of the article.

The "Origins" section talks about Folk music and fails to actually speak on the origins of Dance Music. This section may need to be removed because the following section is labeled "History Dance Music" which would serve the same purpose.

The sections and labels are confusing as well. The layout should be considered a major overhaul. The information can mostly stay, but reorganized.

The links work well as they are.

I don't feel it is bias. The issue is the genre changing as time and culture changes.