User:Jkemp7/Chloroperlidae/Zhengyizhilu Peer Review

The article has a clear and concise lead that overviews the life cycle of Chloroperlidae and vividly describes the body parts of nymph and adult stages. It would be more helpful to hyperlink jargon terms such as nymphs, cerci with wikipedia articles that define these terms. A brief overview of distribution can be placed in the lead as well. Lead paragraph is well written but it can include more overview type of description of the species such as phylogenetic and evolutionary trees perspective, food, distribution, mating behaviour. There is a description of distribution of different Chloroperlidae species around the world but lacks the reasons that why difference species prefer these different regions. That is why if a brief overview of phylogenetic or evolutionary development of species can be included in the lead, readers can better know why these species are located in different parts of the world.

Food part is separate from the lead. Also, food part gives abundant information about the functional feeding types such as scraping and grasping and stabbing which is very creative. From the structure point of view, I recommend including a brief overview of food part into lead. For food part itself, it may be more helpful to introduce the type of food the species consume in a chronological order from larval to adult stage. The term "young" does not give a clear idea about what exact stage the species is at in their life cycle. Also, when I read the term instar, I do not know if it is a stage between nymph and adult or it is a stage before nymph. That is why a clear chronological order of life stages will enhance readers' comprehension about this part. Instar should be hyperlinked.

Also, since the title of this section is food, readers would expect to see what food the species actually consume. There are a lot of phrases and sentences talking about herbivores, detritivores, omnivorous and carnivorous. Again, it would be better if they can be hyperlinked. More importantly, these terms do not apply to our general biological understanding of their meaning. Since the species is a insect, it would be much more clear to write out if it is green algae or zooplankton it consumes.

For life cycle part, it would be better to place the first sentence "The life cycle of Chloroperlidae is considered...it does not contain a pupal stage" at the very beginning of the lead. The lead starts with nymphs habitat and it seems directly jumps into a particular life stage of the insect without emphasizing the reason behind it. If the lead can start with the first sentence of life cycle subsection, it would feel more like an overview of the insect and readers clearly know they have three separate life stages from the beginning. The life cycle subsection is really well written and used multiple credible resources for citation and references.

At last, the balance of structure is good and there is some room for improvement. Since, distribution of Chloroperlidae and food part can all from its independent subsections, I definitely recommend trying to expand them into separate subsections that have as much weight as life cycle subsection. Lead can be expanded to include all three subsections as overview.

It is a great wiki sandbox draft article so keep editing what you have and keep improving. Thanks.

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