User:Jkydrovo/Censorship in North Korea/Marina yasuna Peer Review

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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Censorship in North Korea


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Censorship in North Korea

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

The lead of this article is very solid, I only wish it explains a little bit more about what censorship is. It gives a good understanding of why Korea is ranked so low on the annual Press Freedom Index, giving examples of how all media outlets are controlled and the only source of news is from the Korean Central News Agency. The opening paragraph also establishes a theme to their news being that it's often tainted by political propaganda and promotes the Kim family. I don't think more really needs to be added, it gives substantial background to the rest of the article.

Content:

The content section is full! It hits every point that was mentioned in the opening and then some. It speaks on the history of North Korea, their leaders and what they used their power for, the formation of the Korean Central News Agency, the 2004-2008 cellphone ban, censorship in not just radio and TV, but also journalism and the internet policies put in place by the regime.

Tone and Balance:

I think the tone and balance of the piece is good. It speaks from an unbiased position and strictly tells the facts. This is sometimes hard to achieve with a topic that is so politically opinionated, and majority of people disagree with.

Sources and References:

There are more references than I have time to look at which is awesome! You can tell the writer spent their time thoroughly researching each topic and point made in the reading.

Organization:

The organization of this article helps to create a timeline throughout history. I like how it doesn't put all the leaders right after the other, but rather adds in examples of policies put into place before the next one came into power, like the Central News Agency and Phone Ban.

Images and Media:

Definitely add more images, maybe of the Kim family, or the policies being adhered. It's very text heavy.

Notes:

I think this article has substantial examples and is easy to follow. The set up of the piece is very smooth and easy to read. Overall I'd say just add more images for visual aid.