User:Jkydrovo/Censorship in North Korea/MattK82002 Peer Review

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Censorship in North Korea


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Lead:

I think the lead is strong. It is concise and delivers on what censorship in North Korea is. Once you start editing the article, I would add the things you plan to talk about in the lead which will help flesh the article out. It is also strong since it introduces the KCNA and the 3 leaders of North Korea thus far.

Content:

There is a lot of content already in the article so you can build off those things. I would maybe add sections about some of the punishments given out for violating media related laws in North Korea. I have heard some really crazy things about whole families getting "taken out" even if only one person breaks the law. You can also add a section about figures who have done secret reporting in North Korea. People who have gone against the government and tried to speak up. Another idea is to talk about products illegally smuggled into North Korea like movies and books. Those are just some ideas I had.

Tone and Balance:

I think the tone and balance has been neutral so far. It is hard to do when talking about North Korea since most people disagree with everything about how the country is run. As you edit I would just keep that in mind to remain neutral.

Sources and References:

There are a ton of sources currently. There are also links in the article related to certain people and events. I'm sure more sources will be added as you add to the article. Maybe get a few more scholarly articles since some of the current sources aren't from academic journals.

Organization:

The organization is perfect so far I would keep up with their current format. It is broken up into sections which allows for easy reading, and you can find information you're looking for quickly.

Images and Media:

There is a lack of images. I would suggest adding images of the other leaders besides Kim Jong-Un and also add more examples of propaganda.