User:Jkydrovo/Censorship in North Korea/Sean4or Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jkydrovo, Ajkendall100559, Brookebaarber, Hparks2024, Mattcvogel, Lmhealy


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jkydrovo/Censorship_in_North_Korea?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Censorship in North Korea

Evaluate the drafted changes
Quick points after reviewing the drafted outline:

Lead: Censorship doesn't need to be defined in this article itself; instead, it can be linked to another article about censorship as a whole. Use facts and statistics as examples to the extreme amount of censorship in North Korea -- the Reporters Without Borders statistic is fine, but other ones can be used as well. Update the ranking with 2022 information.

Body: I appreciate how everything has been broken up into different sections, instead of combining everything under one "history" section as it currently is right now. "Reaction of outside media to [North Korean] Censorship" should be its own section in and of itself, as it doesn't deal necessarily of censorship within North Korean politics but the reaction of the international community. I agree that "Punishments for Breaking Censorship" should be listed last; there are probably some other Wikipedia articles you can find concerning this topic to place under "See Also."

References: Citations needed.

Overall Impression:

A majority of content outlined is relevant to the topic, and is up to date with current censorship practices in North Korea. The drafted outline is well-organized and breaks down each part of the article appropriately. These changes would make the article easier to read, and breaks down censorship from history to the present. References are needed, as there currently aren't any. The content can be improved by discussing censorship by other means than just the technological.