User:Jlearner022/Jamaican Blue Mountain Coffee/Kclar078 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jlearner022


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Jlearner022/Jamaican Blue Mountain Coffee


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Jamaican Blue Mountain Coffee

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Jlearner022, thanks for reviewing my draft, I figured I would return the favour.


 * The content added in the lead is neutral, concise and relevant. I believe you made a typo, writing 1853 instead of 1953. Describing the production numbers in pounds per year instead of boxes may constitute original research. Other than that your lead is very good and adds relevant and useful information to understand the topic.


 * Your work under "Jamaican Blue Mountain Coffee Day" is also relevant, neutral, and from reliable sources. Statements accurately reflect what your sources say, however "... beginning of a new relationship between Jamaica and Japan after the second world war" is only mentioned as "prosperity" in your source (6). I am not sure if the source is referring to prosperity in Japan, Jamaica, or between the two countries, so potentially a different source is needed to back up that statement. This source (6) is also probably the least reliable, as it appears to be a kind of blog. The final sentence is a run on sentence, but is accurate and relevant.


 * Under "Blue Mountain Coffee Festival", the first sentence would probably be considered close paraphrasing and therefore plagiarism. Also, it might be best to specify which years of the festival offered which events for a better understanding of what happens at the festival each year and it's changes over time. Or, I would suggest referring to the festival in present tense as it seems that it is a yearly event. Other than that, it is balanced and contains relevant information from reliable sources.

Overall, your draft has a clear structure, remains neutral in presentation, and is clearly cited from mostly reliable sources. The live Wikipedia page will certainly benefit from your contributions!

Good luck! - Kclar078