User:Jlpaulsen22/Jones v. North Carolina Prisoners' Labor Union/Wlynch87 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * JLPaulsen22

(provide username)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jlpaulsen22/Jones_v._North_Carolina_Prisoners%27_Labor_Union?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Jones v. North Carolina Prisoners' Labor Union

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * 1) Wording
 * 2) There are some sections that can be a little hard to read. A spot that I thought could use some different wording is the second paragraph of "The Ruling of The Court District" section, where I found it harder to follow along with than the other sections. an extra sentence describing how why the court didn't give a proper defense and why they ruled in favor of the prison administrators would be helpful. There are also some basic spelling mistakes throughout, and running it through Grammarly before you post a final draft would fix these mistakes.
 * 3) What are the strengths of the content added?
 * 4) I felt like the biggest strength that you added was the depth of the topic. You did very well at going deeper into detail on what happened throughout the court case and giving both arguments for and against the ruling. I also liked how you started out the Wikipedia page by reciting the first amendment, which is mainly what the court case was deciding over.
 * 5) Images and Media
 * 6) I feel like some added images with relevant captions would really help improve your article and keep the readers engaged. Some ideas that I think you could add would be an image of the active supreme court justices that voted on the case with a caption listing their names and political association. I feel like this would help give the reader an idea of how the different political parties aligned themselves in this court case. Also if you could find a photo of the case being discussed in the courthouse, I feel like that would be a great image to include in the article.