User:Jmjohnson43/Federal Election Campaign Act/BlueJay14127 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jmjohnson43


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Current Draft


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Current Article

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: As it is written currently (and I don't think you've made any/many changes) the lead introduces the topic pretty well. My only note would be to rewrite/reorganize it so that there are no one-sentence paragraphs.

Content: New content in the draft is well written and more informative of the original provisions of the Act. However, what is the connection between the non-passage of the Political Broadcast Act of 1970 and the introduction of FECA? Did FECA build upon the former bill? A sentence connecting the two would read better. And if I'm reading it wrong and there isn't a connection between the two, separate paragraphs might be less confusing (could very well just be me though).

Tone and Balance: New content is written in a neutral tone and is agenda-less.

Organization: The new content in your draft looks like it'll fit into the article well. As for the article as its written, I would suggest moving the paragraph beginning "In 1976, the Supreme Court in..." to under the "1976 Amendments" heading and making the 1979 amendments into its own heading for structural sake (Also I know these don't relate to the 1974 version you are researching but it would make the article prettier).

Images and Media: There are currently no images and it honestly doesn't need any. If you want you could add a picture of the president signing the legislation into law but totally not necessary.

Overall: Pretty good start!