User:Jmkgkn/Dark triad/Knowledge297 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Jmkgkn)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jmkgkn/Dark_triad?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Prior to providing a review of this draft I must state that I understand this is only the beginning of our Wiki project so I know that most people, including myself, are still researching and thinking about what they want to include in their articles. Being that this is the beginning and I also do not know everything that you plan to include in this article, I am limited to my knowledge of what you plan on including and what you wish not to include. Some of the things that I suggest are ideas that I plan on incorporating into my own paper and you also may have these same ideas.

I will start off by assessing what you currently have written. The first thing that I would suggest is adding information explaining what the dark triad traits are, I would use this as your lead prior to the topic of Crime. I would briefly summarize each trait (Narcissism, Psychopathy, and Machiavellianism) and then lead into how these traits influence criminal activity. Being that this article is concerning the dark triad in general, you don't need to provide a whole lot of information on these traits because each trait will have its own wiki page that readers can refer to if they want to know more about them individually. I don't see any issues with what you have written currently and I understand that more information regarding crime will be included later. However, I would also suggest that when you writing in the topic of crime I would separate each type of crime into its own sub-heading so that the information flows smoothly and is more concise. For example, you may write about crime in general and then could include a sub-heading concerning cybercrime.

&lt;nowiki&gt;I don't see any issues with your sources being that none of them seem bias and they are also diverse in the information that they provide. This is pretty much all I have to say with this review being that there isn't that much information to review because of how early we are into the project. Anyhow, I think you are going to do great and I look forward to looking at this article when its all finished! Good luck! Knowledge297 (talk) 21:35, 27 March 2022 (UTC)

Thank you for the feedback. We did not explain what we are doing well enough which has caused some confusion. The original article already has sections that go over each trait, so we will simply be adding onto the article, using these sections as the framework. That said, we will get into why these traits have an increase in the crime and try to find any overlap as the main focus point. We will also move cybercrime to its own subheading as you made a good point that the flow is off. This will also let us divide it into other sections if needed. Jmkgkn (talk) 00:56, 11 April 2022 (UTC)