User:Jmvelasquez/Gold mining/TLRX Peer Review

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Jmvelasquez
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:Jmvelasquez gold mining draft
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Gold mining

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Clarity

 * The first sentence added "During a series of excavations carried out between 1878-1992, several graves were found with more than 6kg of gold."
 * It would be more clear to say where these excavations were carried out
 * The placer mining section you added
 * this is a good addition to the overall completeness of the article, but including a few more definitions in the section you added would be useful
 * e.g. Placer mining is a method of extracting gold from alluvial deposits such as sand, gravel, and sediment. These are known as placer deposits which are typically found in riverbeds, stream beds, and floodplains. (Including here a sentence on how these deposits look or how they are different to other deposit types) Unlike hard-rock mining, which involves excavating solid rock formations, water or dredging is used to extract the gold. (Include here a definition on dredging. And explain how the gold extracted is different to hard rock mined gold?)
 * I like this section a lot and think its good but a little further clarification on this would be make it just that much better.
 * Sluicing
 * The sentence included in this section "Sluices work on the principle that heavier particles will sink to the bottom of a stream, while those that are lighter will be carried downstream and expelled"
 * Including the principle here was very helpful in understanding the whole premise of the section
 * Cyanide process
 * This addition "This a metallurgical technique used to extract gold from lower grade ores by converting gold into a water soluble coordination complex."
 * Maybe consider adding a definition for metallurgical technique and maybe explain how the gold is then converted back to sold useable gold after this process

Structure

 * I think you did a really good job of furthering the structure of this article
 * you added the placer mining section which was good to enhance the overall completeness of this article

Neutrality Tone and Balance

 * In the statistics section you added "In 2023, the annual gold demand of 4,448 tonnes was 5% below that of 2022. The total gold demand in 2023 was the highest at 4,899 tonnes."
 * This is a good addition because there was not any recent data.
 * cyanide process
 * this addition " Furthermore there are potentials for accidental spills or leaks to cause harm to aquatic ecosystems and human health"
 * was really good in adding to the balance of the section
 * Impact section
 * all the additions at the bottom of this section were really good in explaining the impact of the mining better.

Sources and References

 * There are a few missing citations (I listed the ones i found below in the improvements sections)
 * The sources are overall really good and quite varied (good job)
 * Your reference list makes me feel like I have to really work harder on mine :)

Overall impressions/Suggestions for Improvement

 * Missing citations for these additions:
 * In the dredging section, you including this sentence "This method is particularly popular in areas where gold is found at river bottoms or submerge deposits."
 * in the rocker box section "Although simple and inexpensive, it is not efficient as the previously discussed mining techniques."
 * impact section "Despite the existence of several laws that regulate environmental crimes, illegal practices in mining tends to happen because of an absence of enforcement."
 * I included suggestions above in the different sections
 * Overall i think you did a really good job on this. I like that you added a relevant section and that you added some updated and current facts (like the statistics addition). Your references were good and relevant and (from what I could tell) from reliable sources. The one thing I could suggest is that maybe restructuring some of your sentences to be a bit clearer and a little bit more formal to suit the surrounding sentences better.
 * Good Job!