User:Jnaidoo03/Dumile Feni/Km79358n Peer Review

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General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jnaidoo03


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dumile_Feni


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Evaluate the drafted changes
This draft opens very well and gives a great insight into the artist Dumile Feni.

What's Good?
I enjoyed how the article dove into Dumile's heritage and introduced the topic of apartheid. The article expresses some very interesting topics. The fact that his art was heavily inspired by the struggles of apartheid is very interesting, especially when you look at his art. I also found the fact that many South Africans are unaware of his art interesting, even though some of his art is inspired by the historical events in South Africa.

I also enjoyed how there was information with dates of all of Dumile's exhibitions. The organization of information is also constructed well.

What Could Be Better
Although the topic of apartheid is introduced in this article, I believe a small description of what apartheid was and its historical significance would be useful. This would help give more character to the artists work since it is inspired by those events. Something I also noticed that was missing was the transition between his early life and career. His early life concluded while he is still in South Africa and his Career begins in London, Los Angeles and New York. Applying a deeper analysis into his career would help this article.

The article doesn't mention a lot regarding his personal life as well. Diving deeper into his personal life would help give a deeper understanding into the artist.

In conclusion, this article shows a great structure for a first draft and shows great potential into what will become an insightful article into Dumile Feni. There are a few missing pieces that the article lacks such as deeper analysis into a few areas regarding the artists upbringing, early life and career. All in all I enjoyed reading this article.