User:Jnf2/Yona Wallach/Rebecca Topper Peer Review

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General info
Hi Julia! Nice work on your article : )

Lead
Your lead has a great intro sentence. I'm not sure that you need all of the information that's in the second paragraph to contained in the lead (it seems a little too specific for the introduction).

Content
Your content is all relevant and seems up to date.

Tone and Balance
Some of your material does not seem to fit the neutral wikipedia tone. Parts seem like an extrapolation of her desires or opinions (for example, "She began to associate with petty thieves and drug dealers, intrigued by their lifestyle and the ugly reality of the world"). Similarly, some parts seem like they are probably true but unverifiable (for example, "instead she learned from the world around her in Tel Aviv"). I think material of this second type could be rephrased to sound more neutral and therefore credible.

Sources and References
You don't have your sources noted right now (neither do I), so it's hard to judge this element of your article. I think noting where references might go would at least demonstrate how often you're citing from each source.

Organization
Your content is well-written! I like the organization of the articles into the sections.

Images and Media
I think you have good photos included in the article. The updates you made to the little media box things are useful. I would say that the caption on the first photo (the members of the Wallach family) could be made a little more clear regarding who is left-most (though it can be worked out based on who is in the picture).

Overall impressions
You've definitely made the article more complete. The image of Wallach's life is much fuller. I would check for the neutral tone and for an objective presentation of information. Beside that and adding sources, I think it looks great!