User:Jnp014/Immunotherapy/R33nayl3aves Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jnp014


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Jnp014/Immunotherapy


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Immunotherapy

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead:

User added in information clarifying what "biological therapy" was in the context of immunotherapy. This information was properly cited and is useful for understanding the article. User may want to rewrite this sentence as it reads very similarly to what the source has written upon biological therapy. The lead could use more citations for some of the information that was already present prior to the user's edits. Otherwise the lead could use some minor editing for aesthetics or organizational purposes. Some of the information could be better grouped together as paragraphs rather than single sentences. This seems to be an issue from before the user's edits.

Content:

User has added a paragraph about the immune system under the section "immune tolerance" which is useful when understanding immune tolerance. User may want to link to the "immune system" wikipedia article and check if the information they provided is repetitive. Adding links to a wikipedia article that can expand upon a related topic can be helpful when people are trying to understand articles such as immunotherapy.

Tone and Balance:

Content added is neutral in tone and does not lead into any particular view on immunology.

Organization:

Content added is easy to read and does not appear to have any grammatical errors.

Overall Impressions:

The information added seemed well cited and adds to the article, however I am unsure if adding the information was necessary vs adding a link to another Wikipedia article. The article seems well written and mostly complete but perhaps the user could look at updating citations or adding more information regarding biological therapy specifically.