User:JocelynMahri/South Chilcotin Mountains Provincial Park/TJmukuro Peer Review

Draft Username
JocelynMahri

Reviewed Draft

 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:JocelynMahri/South_Chilcotin_Mountains_Provincial_Park?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

Article current version.

 * South Chilcotin Mountains Provincial Park

Evaluate the drafted changes
Key Review

The article is well structured and content is organized well with the use of the headings and subheadings. The article is very strong in explaining and breaking down the different ecological zones within the protected areas while also doing a good job starting of with what the overall climate looks like before breaking down the different zones. Another Well covered section is the Wildlife of the area, where the article gives a good insight to the different groups types of plants and animals like birds, mammals and insects. A good insight on the indigenous history of the land is given and including the actual names of the tribes (Tsilhqot’in, St’at’imc, and Secwepemc Nations) is done with great detail and accuracy. The table included is definitely good as it gives good reference to what was being said in the previous paragraph and helps understand the geology of the area.

Improvements & Conclusion

The Article can be improved further by adding more historical context to the different sections in order to understand activity and the land before it was protected. The article can be further improved by also adding a "Human activity" section for readers to have an insight of the interactions humans have with the area present and past. The tone of the article is quite formal and well delivered while overall structure and flow of content is Its strength, It starts form a holistic perspective and is broken down into smaller pieces as the reader continuous to read which helps with understanding and picturing what the article is saying without confusing or throwing off the reader. Definitely keep the structure and headings as you continue to improve the article. The sources are well placed and go handing hand with the information given, I would recommend adding links to some of the terms within the article (like "whitebark pine") in order for viewers to quickly understand what the term means or refers to while they are reading, this helps with the overall flow of the whole article.