User:Jocelynn19/Cybersex trafficking/Nicole1303 Peer Review

Hey Jocelynn!

This is Nicole. I saw you made some minor edits. I also see that you have a small paragraph in your sandbox, but you have not yet set it live. Maybe you could input your paragraph into the actual article. I would also specify who "they" is in your paragraph, and maybe make your writing flows. It seems that you have small sentences because you're trying to get several sources into one paragraph, but you can combine a couple sentences and add both citations at the end of the sentence. Don't be afraid to go out of your comfort zone and edit the live article. Make some punctuation edit as well as grammar and check to make sure there isn't plagiarism. Other than that! keep going, I know it can be confusing but you can always ask questions.

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Jocelyn


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