User:Joe.harkins.richmond/Qasr al-Kharana/Vsmithmartin Peer Review

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Joe.harkins.richmond


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 * Qasr Kharana
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 * Qasr Kharana

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Hey Joe, I really enjoyed reading your contributions on the page!

I think you chose an interesting desert castle to write about since there is still little information on when are why it was built. The small bit of information you added under the lead was a good idea since it clarifies why there are different theories on when it was built and its purpose. Your sources are all fairly up to date, which is good when understanding the castles purpose and place in time.

I only have a few suggestions in reviewing your article. The first is just that you used the word constructed twice in the same sentence: "It is unclear when the palace was constructed, but it was likely constructed during the Umayyad Dynasty." I would just find another word so that your writing is more formal.

Under the "Purpose" section in the article, you include Hill as one of your sources but he isn't introduced. I thought it might be important to introduce him like you did in the 'History" with what he does and why he is scholarly, or put the History section before the Purpose section. I don't know what would be best, but it was just confusing when reading it because I didn't know who Hill was until later in the page.

Overall you have a lot of good information which transformed the quality of this article. Good job!