User:Joeyslinger1/Gardening/TLRX Peer Review

General info
Joeyslinger1
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:Joeyslinger1/Gardening
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Gardening

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Hello! Here is my peer review of your article :)

Clarity


 * in the lead section third paragraph
 * Gardening can be difficult to differentiate from farming. They are most easily differentiated based on their primary objectives. Farming prioritizes saleable goods and may include livestock production whereas gardening often prioritizes aesthetics and leisure. (Citation needed) As it pertains to food production, gardening generally happens on a much smaller scale with the intent of personal or community consumption. It is important to note that there are cultures which do not differentiate between farming and gardening. This is primarily because subsistence agriculture has been the main method of farming throughout its 12,000 year history and is virtually indistinguishable from gardening.
 * This paragraph you added was really good! Its good how you introduced the history so the next sections made sense.
 * I am a little bit confused on what you mean by "Prehistory"
 * maybe consider including a defining paragraph at the beginning of this section to clarify and distinguish the prehistory from the history sections?
 * Sentence length
 * This is a really long sentence "From the boreal forests of Canada to the temperate forests and grasslands of Chile and Argentina different communities have developed niches including the use of fire for ecosystem maintenance and resetting successional sequences, the sowing of wild annuals, the sowing of domesticated annuals (e.g. three sisters, New World crops), creating berry patches and orchards, manipulation of plants to encourage desired traits(e.g. increased nut, fruit, or root production), and landscape modification to encourage plant and animal growth (e.g. complex irrigation or terraces)" Maybe consider breaking it into a few smaller sentences for easier reading?

Balanced coverage and Neutrality

Structure
 * I saw in your "Note to Robin" section that you plan to expand the prehistory section you added to include sections on Asian, European, African and Oceanic gardening?
 * I think these sections would be useful to "balance" out the section on the Americas.
 * I think these sections would be really interesting to read (I'm looking forward to reading the rest)
 * I think the structure you have already laid out is pretty good.
 * I think once you include the other sections it will be even better.
 * I like that you added a "Prehistoric" viewpoint to the article. I didn't even realize that it was missing until I read your contribution
 * I think where you included your contribution (at the beginning above the history section) was a good decision.

Sources


 * References format
 * there are a few references you have that have the error "check date values"
 * Your sources are really good! And as far as I can tell from reliable sources. Once the few formatting errors are sorted out, the references are good to go.

Overall Impressions/Suggestions for improvement


 * Missing citations
 * to my understanding in Wikipedia the general practice is to have a citations after every sentence?
 * I am not sure if that is correct but there were a few places where I think you could include citations. I listed a few below this.
 * in the lead section end of the second paragraph "Gardens take many forms, some only contain one type of plant while others involve a complex assortment of plants with no particular order."
 * first sentence of prehistory section "Plant domestication is seen as the birth of agriculture, however, it is arguably proceeded by a very long history of gardening wild plants."
 * There are some places in the paragraphs that would benefit from a definition or two
 * e.g. "Indigenous gardens such as forest gardens therefore do not only serve as a producer of foods, medicines, or materials, but also pleasant aesthetics." Here defining forest gardens would be useful to understand the whole sentence better.
 * Overall:
 * I liked the overall idea of your additions and once you add the sections you mentioned in the beginning I feel like you are going to have a really good article here! And what you have already done is really good and interesting. A little bit of refinements (mentioned above) but overall its a really good contribution.