User:JohnB19/Ten-pin bowling/ToriCheer18 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

JohnB19


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:JohnB19/Ten-pin bowling


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ten-pin bowling

Lead

 * Yes, the lead includes an introductory sentence that is clear and concise and describes the article's topic well.
 * No, the lead does not include a description of the article's major sections.
 * No, the lead does not include information that is not present in the article.
 * In my opinion, the lead is a little overly detailed.

Content

 * Yes, the content added is relevant to the topic.
 * Yes, the content added is up-to-date as well.
 * I did not fund ant content that I thought was missing from this article or did not belong.
 * No, this article does not deal with Wikipedia's equality gaps. I also do not think that this article addresses topics that are related to historically underrepresented populations or topics.

Tone and Balance

 * Yes, the content added is neutral.
 * No, there are no claims that are heavily biased toward a particular position in this article.
 * No, there is no viewpoints that are overrepresented or underrepresented in this article either.
 * No, the content added does not attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another.

Sources and References

 * Yes, from what I can tell all new content is backed up by a reliable secondary source of information.
 * Yes, the content accurately reflect that the sources that are cited say.
 * Yes, the sources are thorough.
 * Yes, the sources are current as well.
 * Yes, the sources listed are written by a diverse spectrum of authors. Yes, they also include historically marginalized where possible.
 * Yes, there are some better sources that could be used, but the sources listed work fine too.
 * Yes, the links do work.

Organization

 * Yes, the content added is well written, it is clear and concise.
 * No, I did not see any spelling or grammatical errors in the content added.
 * Yes, I would have to say the content added is well organized.

Overall Impressions

 * No, I wouldn't say that because of the content added it makes the article more complete. However, it does add to it and further explains the topic.
 * The strengths of the content added is that it is easy to understand. So, if I were someone who did not know how ten-pin bowling worked the content added would be a great place for me to start out reading.
 * The content added can be improved by going into more detail and breaking down the each topic within the article a little more than it already has.