User:JohnFrum1441/Mesoamerican pyramids/Expat13 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

JohnFrum1141


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:JohnFrum1441/Mesoamerican pyramids
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mesoamerican pyramids

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi JohnFrum1441! Considering that you still have sources to find and use, I won't tell you to find more sources, obviously. The sources that you already have seem reliable and pertinent. Your organization is straightforward and logical. You do a good job of spacing out your written additions, with no section being overly long compared to others, and vice versa.

For the most part, it is concise and easy to read. I tried thinking of some words that might help in the "Mother and Sister Culture Models" section. Is "passive" the word you're not satisfied with? How about these instead: underlying, rudimentary, intrinsic, overarching, or inert?

As for the heading title, how about...(the debate over) Olmec architectural model, (the debate over) Olmec architectural influence, (the debate over) influence of olmec architecture, etc.