User:JohnFrum1441/Mesoamerican pyramids/Skinnyeleven Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

JohnFrum1441


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:JohnFrum1441/Mesoamerican_pyramids?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mesoamerican pyramids

Evaluate the drafted changes
Right off the bat I'd consider a title like "Influence of the Olmecs." I like both of your subheadings, I think they set up what you're talking about well. I know the content within them is a bit sparse because of some trouble getting your sources, but what you've got written content wise is solid. I think your first sentence in "Mother and Sister Culture Models" could stand to be trimmed down/re-arranged a little. Also add in a third sentence in the middle fully explaining what the mother culture model means. In your last sentence of that section swap "the Olmecs were not a sole" to "the Olmecs were not the sole." Maybe instead of "passive" try "partial"?

As far as your section on Ceibal, maybe trim down the second sentence, make it more direct. Otherwise, that section looks good, but remember to put sources at the end of sentences.

Overall, good work, can't wait to see what you can add with more sources.