User:JohnFrum1441/Mormon colonies in Mexico/Jlbettis Peer Review

Lead

 * There is no edits to the Lead

Content

 * The content added does eem relevant to the topic.
 * The content seems up-to-date.
 * In the "Evacuation and Return Paragraph" I got the impression the the last sentence addition was contradicting with the following sentences. That is to say, one says the church thrived and the other says they did not.
 * The additions do a good job of adding in perspectives from other groups like Indigenous Mexicans.

Tone and Balance

 * The content added uses language that I have heard LDS members don't like to use anymore (i.e. Mormon). I do not know though if it is important to feature for academic purposes.
 * I felt the claims were merely attempting to add other perspectives not trying to persuade the reader.
 * The additions attempt to balance out the articles viewpoints.
 * I don't feel the content is trying to sway the reader.

Sources and References

 * There is no citation on the second addition to the "Evacuation and Return Paragraph."
 * There is only one source used, having another source might help solidify your additions.
 * Sources seem current.
 * Links do work.

Overall Impressions

 * The article feels like it has a more complete picture with more diverse perspective.
 * The content is strong in that it emphasizes the role of marginalised peoples.
 * I think maybe finding another source just to diversify your information would be helpful.

General info

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