User:JohnManuel/criteria

1. As for the first requirement (It is well written),

* Per Wikipedia:Lead, the lead needs to be expanded so that it adequately summarizes the article. * Per Wikipedia:Context and Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates) years can be linked only if they provide context for the article. I don't think that is the case here. Please delink them. * Per Wikipedia:Context and Wikipedia:Build the web, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link January 15, 2006. * Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (numbers), there should be a non-breaking space -  between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 100 km, use 100 km, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 100 km. * It would be nice to add the persondata template, check Wikipedia:Persondata for more information. This is not mandatory, though * Per Wikipedia:Guide to layout the last few sections should be reordered. Instead of References/External links/See also it should be See also/References/External links. * Per in WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes should be located right after punctuation marks. * All one-sentence paragraphs should be expanded or merged.

* In the sentence Her contributions to the formation of the wartime Women's Auxiliary Army Corps (WAAC) and WASP (Womens Airforce Service Pilots), format should be standarized, either Name (Abbreviation) or Abbreviation (Name). I would go for the first form as follows: Women's Auxiliary Army Corps (WAAC) and Womens Airforce Service Pilots (WASP). * In youngest of the five children of Mary (Grant) and Ira Pittman, why is Grant in parenthesis? * The sentence and at age 15 left her home in DeFuniak Springs, Florida, working as a hairdresser until she wound up in New York City needs to be rewritten for clarity. * In Only later did she meet Floyd Bostwick Odlum, the only does not make sense, as Floyd Bostwick has not been mentioned before * The sentence Calling her line of cosmetics "Wings," she flew her own aircraft around the country promoting her products should be reworded to She called her line of cosmetics "Wings" and flew her own aircraft around the country to promote her products. It is better to write about historical facts in past tense. * The sentence Years later, Odlum used his Hollywood connections to get Marilyn Monroe to endorse her line of lipstick seems irrelevant for this article. * In Known by her friends as "Jackie," it should be "Jackie", instead of "Jackie,". * In She had won the Bendix and set a new transcontinental speed record as well as altitude records (by this time she was no longer just breaking woman's records but was setting overall records), the parenthesis should be removed, a comma inserted between "records" and "by", and the last "was" deleted. * In She was the first woman to break the sound barrier (with Chuck Yeager right on her wing), the whole phrase in parenthesis does not seem relevant * In She won five Harmon Trophies as the outstanding woman pilot in the world, "as the" should be replaced by "for" * Before the United States joined World War II, she was part of "Wings for Britain" should be Before the United States joined World War II, she was part of the program "Wings for Britain" * Jackie Cochran wrote to Eleanor Roosevelt to introduce the proposal of starting a women's flying division should be Jackie Cochran wrote to Eleanor Roosevelt to propose the creation of a women's flying division * The sentence (The WAAC was given full military status on 1 July 1943, thus making them part of the Army. At the same time, the unit was renamed Women's Army Corps [WAC].) should not be in parenthesis. It would be better in a footnote. * The sentence (Ferrying Command was the air-transport service of the Army Air Corps; the command was renamed Air Transport Command in June 1942). should not be in parenthesis. It would be better in a footnote. * because they wanted to be flying for (and in) the United States should be replaced by because they wanted to fly for (and in) the United States * Postwar, she began flying the new jet engine aircraft should read Postwar, she flew the then new jet engine aircraft * In the ONLY woman to ever be President of the Federation Aeronautique, "only" should be written in lower case * In However, as a result of her involvement in politics and the military, she would become close friends', "she would become" should be replaced by "she became" * In and she would play a major role in his successful campaign, "she would play" should be replaced by "she played" * Despite her lack of education, Ms. Cochran had a quick mind and an affinity for business and the investment proved a lucrative one. What investment? You were just talking about the Ike campaign * The sentence From many countries around the world, she received citations and awards would be better in active voice * In '

2. As for the second requirement (It is factually accurate and verifiable),

* As a general rule all paragraphs should have at least one footnote. * The paragraph that starts After a friend offered her a ride in an aircraft, a thrilled Jackie Cochran began taking flying lessons... lacks sources. * The sentence That year, she also set a new woman's national speed record needs a reference, adding the speed achieved would also be nice. * The sentence Sometimes called the "Speed Queen," at the time of her death, no pilot, man or woman, held more speed, distance or altitude records in aviation history, than Jackie Cochran needs a reference. * The paragraph that starts Also in 1940, Cochran wrote a letter to Colonel Robert Olds... lacks sources. * The paragraph that starts In spite of pilot shortages, General Henry H. "Hap" Arnold was the person who... lacks sources. * The paragraph that starts When General Arnold asked Cochran to go to Britain to study the ATA... lacks sources. * The paragraph that starts She was also the first woman to land and take off from an aircraft carrier... lacks sources. * The sentence Later, in 1951, the Boston Chamber of Commerce voted her one of the 25 outstanding businesswomen in America. In 1953 and 1954, the Associated Press named her "Woman of the Year in Business." needs a reference, also the quotation mark goes before the period * The sentence Blessed by fame and wealth, she donated a great deal of time and money to charitable works needs a reference * The paragraph that starts Jacqueline Cochran died on August 9, 1980 at her home in Indio... lacks sources. * The paragraph that starts Her aviation accomplishments never gained the continuing media attention given those of Amelia Earhart... lacks sources. * The section on her Awards lacks references * The section "References" should be split into a section "Notes" with all the footnotes and a section "Bibliography" or "References" for an alphabetical listings of sources with full bibliographical details (year of publication, city, publisher, etc.). Also the books listed have not been used in any footnote. Have they been used for the article? If so they should be used in footnotes, if not they should be deleted or listed under "Further references".

3. As for the third requirement (It is broad in its coverage),

The article looks compliant.

4. As for the fourth requirement (It is neutral),

The article looks compliant.

5. As for the fifth requirement (It is stable),

The article looks compliant.

6. As for the sixth requirement (Any images it contains are appropriate),

The article looks compliant.

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