User:Johnduffy23/Military communications/Hannah.hrm Peer Review

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Evaluate the drafted changes
I think you did an awesome job of using your sources that are easily accessible and composing a well thought out overview of your topic. I am a little bit confused when reviewing this article because I am not sure what information you are wanting to add to the existing main article of your topic. Is all of this new information that has a place in the existing article? You provide access to a lot of resources that support your evidence in the article and you do a great job of presenting information in a neutral tone and remaining unbiased. I like that you include examples for some key words along with definitions as well. I think your lead paragraph could include more specifics as to whats to be discussed below in the other sections, it could benefit from brief descriptions of the main points of the article. Good Job!!