User:Johnyha/Ngozi Iwere/Aaronkohanbash Peer Review

General info
(Johnyha)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Johnyha/Ngozi_Iwere&oldid=1185518383#cite_note-4
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:


 * The lead begins with an introductory sentence that clearly focuses on Ngozi Iwere's pioneering community-based approach to HIV/AIDS prevention in Nigeria. It concisely outlines her innovative strategy and its community-driven nature, and summarizes the core aspects of her work effectively.
 * The lead does not provide a breakdown of the article's major sections but instead emphasizes key elements of Iwere's approach and background.
 * There's no information in the lead that's not present in the article. It summarizes and highlights key points that are further elaborated in the article body.
 * The lead is detailed in its explanation of Iwere's approach but doesn't delve into specific sections of the article. It provides a structured summary without being overly detailed.

Content:


 * The content is highly relevant to the topic, discussing Ngozi Iwere's journey, her engagement in health activism, and her significant contributions to community-based health initiatives, specifically targeting HIV/AIDS prevention and women's reproductive health and rights.
 * The content covers Iwere's contributions up to the establishment of the Reclaim Naija Grassroots Movement in 2010. However, I would recommend to add more regarding the movement up to this date
 * This article does address Wikipedia's equity gaps through honing on health issues impacting historically underrepresented populations, particularly HIV/AIDS and women's health in Nigeria.

Tone and balance:


 * The content maintains a neutral tone, presenting Iwere's work objectively without displaying bias or subjective opinions.
 * The article presents factual information about Iwere's work without taking a stance.
 * The viewpoints seem balanced, offering insights into Iwere's efforts without favoring any particular perspective.
 * However, the article states that Ngozi Iwere’s movement was “the first real feminist movement without adding any more context, and upon doing some research, it can be shown that there were other feminist movements at the time. So maybe showing why it was the first “real movement” or taking it out would be good”
 * In addition, they said the Community Life Project helped to make a more inclusive approach to health issues, but I feel like there is more information needed on why

Sources


 * The first link that is supposed to be giving information and it numbered “1” on the list leads to a page not found link. Also for numbers 4 and 5 on the list there is no link to find the source, only the citation
 * After examining multiple sources and comparing with the text, I conclude that they in fact are accurately reflecting the cited sources
 * The sources are very thorough. There is one where they directly found an interview with the woman herself which can not be any more thorough. Also the website that lists the content in the lead and the body are taken directly from reliable sources of information such as books from JSTOR, University approved research papers, and official websites and journals as well with multiple authors that published them together
 * The sources are current, and  range from the early 2000’s all the way up to 2019.


 * The sources are in fact written by a plethora of authors. There is “Holding the World Together: African Women in Changing Perspective by Nwando Achebe” which gives her own account. There are an additional 8 authors that range from professional researchers, students,and those living at the same time and partaking in the same activities.


 * From digging in hopes of finding reliable sources that would be of contribution, I continuously found the same journal articles, websites, and papers that they had already sourced for their article. It seems as if they had exhausted the available resources to the fullest.

Organization:


 * The content is an easy read, offering a clear account of Ngozi Iwere's remarkable journey. It's engaging and easy to follow, but in some parts, more detail could bring out the very significance of her work.
 * I didn't spot any noticeable grammar or spelling issues. It seems pretty perfect overall, but some areas could flow a tad better for a smoother read with shorter sentences and some filler words can be taken out.
 * It's nicely structured, but they could make it a little more flowing between the different phases of her career.

-There are no images or media

In reviewing the article notability requirements, here are my main takeaways


 * The article does have 2-3 reliable sources independent of the subject
 * However the article does not do a detailed enough job to qualify as its own main page on wikipedia
 * The sources do represent all of the information, even down to the events and countries that are listed, as they are cross-referenced to other Wikipedias as well.
 * The information is reliable to the extent that it comes from journals of the governing body of Africa all the way to independent researchers that use a unbiased approach to the information they present