User:Johnyha/Ngozi Iwere/Jwin777 Peer Review

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The lead seems to be up to date with the most current information written in the rest of the article. The lead of the article is a concise paragraph that summarizes the main points of Ngozi Iwere's life. The topic sentence of the led underlines the main topic of the article, focusing on the fact that Iwere was committed to informing her home country about the HIV/AIDS epidemic. The lead does not seem to outline the main topics of the article, but does mention the main points about her life. Also, the lead does not include information that is not mentioned in the rest of the article, in fact it serves to be an outlet to generally mention Iwere's efforts, while the body of the article dives into depth on her life and efforts made towards addressing HIV/ AIDS.

The content in the body paragraphs is relevant to the topic, it is essentially an expansion of key details mentioned in the lead. The content seems to be up-to-date, as it mentions her primary efforts to up to 2010. However, the article will be stronger if it mentions her more recent efforts post 2010 to see how involved she is regarding educating the community about major health concerns in recent times. The content follows a solid chronological approach, beginning with Iwere's early life and following to how she got involved with activism. Furthermore, the article does check off one of Wikipedia' equity gaps, as this is an article focusing on a Nigerian women's efforts to educate her community about healthcare concerns.

The tone of this article is neutral, as it impartially talks about Ngozi Iwere's early life and her contributions regarding protecting and education women about AIDS in Nigeria. The author did a good job of remaining unbiased while explaining Iwere's numerous efforts, and the content does not seem to attempt to sway the reader towards a certain viewpoint. The author did a good job of remaining informative in an unbiased stance.

Regarding sources, each new fact and/or statement is backed up with a credible secondary source. For example, basic information regarding date of birth and graduation dates are all cited with valid secondary sources. The sources are through and accurately reflect the literature of the topic, along with containing diverse sources—from African journals to studies to university writings. The sources are all current and all seem to be relevant to the topic. However, regarding the links, some of the citations are unfinished and need to be fixed. More specifically, citations 1-3 are either missing key aspects, such as links to the journal, dates, and titles. The links to the sources seem to work just fine, but Wikipedia flags them as red because they aren't cited properly.

This article is well-organized, as it chronologically expresses Iwere's involvement in social activism. The article is easy to follow along for people who are unfamiliar with Iwere's activism and efforts. There are no grammatical mistakes as well, and all the sentences are clear and concise. Regarding the organization of the categories, it would be better if the title of "article body" was changed to something that reflected Iwere's activism. Also, some more paragraphs that separate her early life from her works and efforts regarding HIV/AIDS would make the article more organized and easier to follow along.

There are no images to peer-review in this article.

Since this is a new article, it is important to see if it meets Wikipedia's Notability requirements. Essentially, the article is supported by 2-3 secondary sources, whether is be JSTOR peer-reviewed articles or interviews. This article also links to other articles, which makes it more discoverable. But, this article does need more headings to better-organize the content and to make it easier to follow.

Overall, this article contains content that neutrally and accurately talks about Iwere's life and accomplishments. Adding more headings and organizing the content will make it easier to follow, and also some citations need to be fixed.