User:Johnyha/Ngozi Iwere/Wyogirl1 Peer Review

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user Johnyha article on Ngozi Iwere
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The lead is a good introduction to the rest of the article. It is concise while still covering the bases of what is in the article's body. The first sentence is good, although I would consider changing the word "pioneering" because it may be construed as persuasive. The lead provides information that it expanded upon in the later section. If anything, I might recommend shortening the lead a little bit and putting some of the information into other sections. Overall, I think the lead is a good starting point for this article.

The content is all relevant and seems mostly up-to-date, according to the sources. I don't think there is any content that does not belong. I might add a short paragraph about Iwere in the last 10 years or so since most of the sources are from 2012 or earlier. It would be helpful to know about Iwere's life and more recent work. The topic definitely addresses a content gap, as it focuses on an African feminist activist and talks in detail about activism related to HIV/AIDS.

The tone of this article is mostly neutral, although I think there are a few phrases that could be altered to make it more impartial. I would consider phrases like "her academic excellence" and "reflecting her deep commitment to social justice" in paragraph 2, and the final sentence in paragraph 4. I think they are well written, but they may be too biased for Wikipedia. The article seems to be very favorable to Iwere, which I totally understand, but I'm not sure if it's too biased.

All claims in the article were directly linked to one of the sources/references. The article seems to reflect well upon the information provided in the sources, and to me, the sources seem pretty thorough on Iwere's activist work. The sources all seem to be about 10-20 years old, which is likely when Iwere was most active, which makes sense. I would include a bit about Iwere's life now if this is at all possible. The sources seem to be written by a very diverse set of authors, including men and women from America, Europe, and Africa. I researched Iwere a bit at the very beginning of this project and the sources in this draft seem pretty comprehensive compared to the journal articles I found. All of the links worked for me except the first link, so that may need to be looked at.

I think that the organization is one thing that could potentially be improved upon in this article. All of the content is clear, concise, and appears to be grammatically correct. However, I think that an extra heading could help the article to seem a little less bulky. Maybe one heading could be about personal life and education, and another could be about her activist work. I think that this would help the article to flow a bit better.

There are no images or media. If possible, I think a picture of Iwere could be helpful.

The article seems very notable and relevant to other content on Wikipedia. There are clearly several reliable peer-reviewed sources drawn upon by the authors. In my own limited experience with the literature on Iwere, the reference list seems very comprehensive and complete. I think generally, the organization is similar to other Wikipedia articles, although I would consider breaking the article body into two separate sections. The links to other Wikipedia pages, such as the African Feminist Forum and Women in Nigeria, add to the relevance and importance of this Wikipedia page. These links will also hopefully lead more people to this article.

Overall, I think the content provides good insight into the life and work of Ngozi Iwere, which is important for many reasons. I think the review of her early life, education, and activist work is complete, and the only thing I would add is some more recent information about her life. The content about her activist work is extremely comprehensive and detailed, which is crucial in an article about such an influential activist. I think a few small edits can be made in tone and organization and this would be a great addition to Wikipedia.