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=Proposed Edits for The Chrysanthemums=


 * 1) Feminism & Culture in that time
 * 2) Tone
 * 3) Symbolism
 * 4) Setting
 * 5) Narrator & Point of View

Reading List

 * The Real Woman Inside The Fence In "The Chrysanthemums"
 * Steinbeck's The Chrysanthemums
 * John Steinbeck's "The Chrysanthemums": A Woman Bound By Society
 * The Texts Of Steinbeck's "The Chrysanthemums"
 * Symbolism in "The Chrysanthemums"

Original
The story has a panoramic view of the Salinas Valley in winter, shrouded in fog. The focus narrows and finally settles on Elisa Allen, cutting down the spent stalks of Chrysanthemums in the garden on her husband’s ranch. Elisa is thirty-five, lean and strong, and she approaches her gardening with great energy. Her husband Henry comes from across the yard, where he has been arranging the sale of thirty steer, and offers to take Elisa to town for dinner and movie to celebrate the sale. He praises her skill with flowers, and she congratulates him on doing well in the negotiations for the steer. They seem a well-matched couple, though their way of talking together is formal and serious. Henry heads off to finish some chores, and Elisa decides to finish her transplanting before they get ready to leave for town.

Soon Elisa hears “a squeak of wheels and a plod of hoofs,” and a man drives up in an old wagon. (He is never named; the narrator calls him simply “the man.”) The man is large and dirty, and clearly used to being alone. He earns a meager living fixing pots and sharpening scissors and knives, traveling from San Diego, California, to Seattle, Washington, and back every year. The man chats and jokes with Elisa, who answers his bantering tone but has no work for him to do. When he presses for a small job, she becomes annoyed and tries to send him away

Revised
The story has a panoramic view of the Salinas Valley in winter, shrouded in fog. The focus narrows and finally settles on Elisa Allen, cutting down the spent stalks of Chrysanthemums in the garden on her husband’s ranch. Elisa is thirty-five, lean, strong, and approaches her gardening with great energy. Her husband, Henry Allen, comes from across the yard, where he has been arranging the sale of thirty steer, and offers to take his wife Elisa to town for dinner and a movie to celebrate the sale. He praised her skill with flowers, and she congratulated him on doing well in the negotiations for the steer. Henry heads off to finish some chores, and Elisa decides to finish her transplanting before they get ready to leave for town. They appeared to be a well-matched couple, even though their way of talking to each other was formal and serious. Henry heads off to finish some chores, and Elisa decides to finish her transplanting before they get ready to leave for town.

While attending to her garden, Elisa hears "a squeak of wheels and a plod of hoofs," and then sees a man drive up in an old wagon. (His name is never mentioned, only referred to by the narrator as "the man.") The man's appearance is dirty, large and clearly used to being alone. He earns a meager living fixing pots and sharpening scissors and knives, traveling from San Diego, California, to Seattle, Washington and back every year. He sees Elisa, jokes and chats with her when she answered his bantering tone but has no work for him to do. When he becomes persistent and presses Elisa for a small job, she becomes annoyed and sends him on his way.