User:Jojobruin24/Diana Yesenia Alvarado/Whiteroses10 Peer Review

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Diana Yesenia Alvarado
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Firstly, the article does an amazing job highlighting this artist. From the article you learn perfectly what the artist does and how they do it.

The article could be more concise and shortened, only showing completely necessary information. For example, the Art section could be cut down in some areas where it reads more like a news article than an encyclopedia like the part that reads " In this same interview, Alvarado talks about the process of working with clay, revealing the depth and significance of her practice. " The quote doesn't stick out to me as something that provides new information on the artist or their work. Cutting it out could help with making the section read as more precise.

The lead section can also be edited to only include the Artist's identity as a Chicana artist that works with ceramics. Or simply put "Diana Yesenia Alvarado (born 1992) is a contemporary Chicana ceramist."

Overall, it is a detailed article with many strengths that highlight this young artist and their impact.