User:Joker12346/Crime in India/Stephaniegrisolia Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Joker12346
 * Link to draft you're reviewing:
 * User:Joker12346/Crime in India

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * There is no lead that indicates what sections have been added/ revised
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * There is no lead written as of this peer review
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * N/A
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * N/A
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?
 * N/A

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * The content that was added includes, the tobacco industry. This is relevant to the topic because although the use of tobacco in India is not illegal a study that was cited states that a lot of minors are developing a dependence to the substance from a young age.
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * All of the content that was added is up to date, with the oldest article cited being from 2016
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * No

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * The content that was added or revised is neutral and uses evidence from studies to support its findings
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * No claims indicate a heavy bias toward one particular postilion
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * No view points are over or under represented
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?
 * No, the content that was added doesn't seem to intend to persuade the reader rather inform them on issues that contribute to crime in India

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Some content that was added does not originate from a peer reviewed journal however, it is sourced by a website called the Indian Journal of Medical Research. Not sure how reliable this information is, maybe review those statistics and back it with a journal or academic article.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Yes the sources are through and they reflect the literature because they are journals that were written in India by first hand observation
 * Are the sources current?
 * Yes the sources are current, most of them being from 2016
 * Check a few links. Do they work?
 * all of the links that were added to the tobacco section are working.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Although it is not first clear what content was added, the section of tobacco is concise and easy to read.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * You are missing some punctuation in your Tobacco section, I recommend reading it over.
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?
 * The content is well organized as it is broken down in easy to read sections

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * The article does include an image of tobacco, which is relevant to the section that was added
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * The image is clearly captioned "water pipe tobacco", but maybe adding a description of its relevance would enhance the image.
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Yes
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?
 * Yes, it is perfectly lined up with the proper section

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * Yes the content that was added made the article more complete and gave the reader another issue of crime to consider in India.
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * The tobacco section was a major strength that was added to the article because it gave a background on crime and how tobacco habits are developed at a young age and how this affects later life.
 * How can the content added be improved?
 * The content should be revised to fix some structure, grammatical and punctuation errors.
 * Also add a lead to describe what you added and or changed to the original article

Overall evaluation
- Overall the content that was added gave a new perspective on the subject and I enjoyed reading your added sections. It was clearly structured and flowed really well!