User:Jonas-heegaard/Football hooliganism/Bellat123 Peer Review

General info
Bella Thier
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 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Football hooliganism
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Football hooliganism

Evaluate the drafted changes
Table of contents looks like a good way to place the information in a way that will make it more understandable to the reader. It will be good to distinguish between the hooligans and the ultras. The additions of the more specific categories will help the reader find more information in better places. The significance of the media portrayal will provide good information on why the public sees them the way they do. I also think the order that the headings are placed in will create an easy read. Removing some of the case studies will help with making the Wikipedia page less hectic to look it. It will also allow a more in depth study on the case studies that are kept in.

Peer Review 2

I think if theres a way to combine violence and behavior that might take down the ToC a little, but other than that I think all of you sections in the ToC will have specific enough information that it won't be too redundant within sections. When starting the writing process, I think you have a great article to work with and add information to, so I think it would be good to pull information from there at the start and then flesh it out within your sandbox. I think choosing which case studies you are going to keep is important, because the original article is just a lot to look at with all of the specifics. For the most part though, I think you won't have to do a lot of writing from scratch.