User:Jonathany1pp/Peter Pan (1953 film)/Jdb004 Peer Review

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Jonathany1pp
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Jonathany1pp/Peter Pan (1953 film)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Peter Pan (1953 film)

Evaluate the drafted changes
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 * Lead: Not Edited.
 * Content: Added additional information about a song but needs to be better tied into the section ("Controversy") to be fluent. Maybe add more on the controversy of it and add sources talking about it?
 * Tone and Balance: The tone of the added content is neutral.
 * Sources and References: None added.
 * Organization: Re-ordered a sentence to make it more chronological. Good change.
 * Images: None in the article but might be a good idea to add some regarding controversial scenes but also, I'm not sure.
 * Overall: the additions are positive but could use some information and sources to be complete. There are some mistakes when inserting a link. " dx.doi.org http://dx.doi.org/10.17658/issn.2058-5462/issue-24/akokoli/p52. Retrieved 2023-10-23. : Missing or empty |title= (help)" Could be fixed.