User:Jonathany1pp/Peter Pan (1953 film)/RyanDing26 Peer Review

General info
Jonathany1pp
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Jonathany1pp/Peter Pan (1953 film)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Peter Pan (1953 film)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The current lead in place of the existing article is holistic of what is expected of movies for Wikipedia. As such, I realize that not much improvements can be made, but I like the initiative to add change!

Content

I like how you have focused primarily on the controversial aspect of Peter Pan to focus on the DEI-related aspects of a seemingly normal movie article. I think the way that you added more context as to what scenes in particular from the movie brought forth the controversy it has undergone, and I liked the rearrangement of different historical perspectives on who believed there was controversy within the movie.

Tone and Balance

As there was not really anything to draw a difference in tone or balance, being that the Wikipedia page itself is just a synopsis of the movie production process and its plot, there is not too much to change within tone. For balance, perhaps viewpoints of those who do not think that there is any controversy to be had around the movie might be a nice touch?

Sources and References

I think that what is currently missing from the edits are the references in which you got the movie context from, as well as some information on for how long the movie has been criticized. However, other than that sources and references seem to be pretty solid currently.

Organization

I appreciate how you shifted around the organization of the personal viewpoints on the movie's controversy, though I know not much is there to be changed.

Images and Media

No images or media are really added. Perhaps photos of any public movements or images of tweets to illustrate the distaste of individuals over the representation of Native Americans might be good?

Overall Impressions

Really nice article that you have started to peer-edit. I believe there might be a lot of valuable perspective to be highlighted from various news sources (while they may be biased, it may be good to look at a variety of them, or research papers/theses on the movie if any exist). Keep up the good work!