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Pieces of the article I am editing -

original piece - Fiddler announced his retirement from the NHL on September 13, 2017 in a Players Tribune article.

my edits to piece - At the age of 37, Fiddler announced his retirement from the NHL on Wednesday, September 13, 2017 in a Players Tribune article. Fiddler ended with playing a total of 877 games in the NHL with 104 goals and 157 assists, for a total of 261 points.

sources - https://www.theplayerstribune.com/en-us/articles/vernon-fiddler-nhl-retirement

http://www.espn.com/nhl/player/stats/_/id/2007/vernon-fiddler

original piece - Vernon Fiddler is of Métis descent and, at the time of his retirement, was one of 9 NHL players with Native roots. Fiddler is a member of the Métis Museum along with current and former NHL players Arron Asham, Rene Bourque, Brad Chartrand, Ronald Delorme, Magnus Flett, Roderick Flett, Dwight King, Vic Mercredi, Richard Pilon, Wade Redden, Sheldon Souray, and Francis St. Marseille.

my edits to the piece - Vernon Fiddler is of Métis descent and, at the time of his retirement, was one of 9 NHL players with Native roots. Fiddler is also one of 70 total Indigenous athletes to ever play in the NHL, and is the 13th of Metis decent to play in the NHL. Fiddler is a member of the Métis Museum along with the other 12 Metis players which include, current and former players Arron Asham, Rene Bourque, Brad Chartrand, Ronald Delorme, Magnus Flett, Roderick Flett, Dwight King, Vic Mercredi, Richard Pilon, Wade Redden, Sheldon Souray, and Francis St. Marseille.[14]

sources - http://www.metismuseum.ca/media/db/11993

https://ca.sports.yahoo.com/news/edmonton-man-collects-cards-70-indigenous-players-skate-nhl-004243315.html

http://nativehockey.com/nhl/

original piece - for this piece there is no original piece because I will be adding a new section called "Retirement"

my edits to the piece - Now retired, Fiddler has moved to Texas with his wife Chrissy and their two children, Blake and Bella. Fiddler is doing charity work with the Stars Foundation and is also helping out the Dallas Stars with any work they ask of him. As well, Fiddler is helping coach his son’s hockey team.

sources - https://sportsday.dallasnews.com/dallas-stars/stars/2017/09/13/vernon-fiddler-found-perfect-balance-boys-game-war-ice

https://www.nhl.com/stars/news/qa-in-first-fall-since-retirement-vernon-fiddler-enjoying-time-away/c-293002570

Wikipedia Assignment Week 2 - Thinking critically about Wikipedia articles including evaluating a Wikipedia article, and leaving suggestions for improving it on the article's Talk page.

My Wikipedia Article - Vernon Fiddler The article is very neutral. The information about Vernon is about his hockey career both on and off the ice, but it is simply facts and statistics about where he played, his goals, and his accomplishments off the ice such as his involvement with the Leukemia and Lymphoma Society. In Vernon’s article there is nothing to suggested a bias, meaning it does not attempt to persuade readers that Vernon is a good hockey player. An example of a bias would be something such as “Vernon is a great player and is a hard-working individual on and off the ice,” but again there is nothing like this in the article.
 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?

Most of the information comes from major companies such as Sports Illustrated and Dallas News, but I do not believe that all of them are neutral sources. An example of this is in the article “Vernon Fiddler traded to Predators by Devils,” and the article is from NHL.com. The article is trying to promote why Vernon is a good hockey player and why he will be a good fit for the Nashville Predators. It does not mention much about his statistics, and the article seems like it is trying to persuade me that this trade was good and Vernon is a good player for Nashville, therefore being a biased source. I also believe that one of the articles listed in the references section is both bias and not applicable to the article. The article “ from  Chloe which goes on to talk about how Chloe “is undoubtedly Fiddler's biggest fan.” This source seems irrelevant and not applicable as it does not mention anything about Vernon, only about this girl named Chloe who has been saving up to see a game of his. It also seems quite bias because the article says why Chloe likes Vernon so much and why he’s a good role model for the community, as if it is trying to persuade me to think that he is a great person and I should but tickets to go see him play as well. Also, no where in the Wikipedia article about Vernon is there any information stating that these articles are bias. Not all the facts and statistics in Vernon’s article is referenced with a source when it should be. Most of the information missing references is about his playing career and the statistics about it. For example, there is no reference when the Wiki page states “On May 6, 2002, Fiddler was signed by the Nashville Predators and was assigned to affiliate, the Milwaukee Admirals,” or “On February 29, 2016, Fiddler played in his 800th regular season NHL game. Fiddler assisted on Dallas’ first goal and later scored the tying goal with 1:31 left in the third period to send the game into overtime.” These are specific facts about him as a hockey player, with specific dates and statistics, yet they are not referenced when they should be. There are several other occurrences when this happens throughout the article and those facts should also be referenced, or else there is no way to know if this information is correct and accurate. Also, as stated before, the article “Vernon Fiddler of Devils reunites with biggest fan” from NHL.com does not seem like a reliable source because it shows a bias trying to persuade me to think that he is a good person. Another concern with this source is that the information it is referenced to does not seem to relate. The information in the Wiki page of Vernon is talking about a partnership with the Make-A-Wish Foundation of North Texas, but when looking at the resource used for this information there is no relationship, as it does not stay anything about this in the “Vernon Fiddler of Devils reunites with biggest fan” article.
 * Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?
 * Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference?

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