User:Jonpcoombes/Cybersecurity and Infrastructure Security Agency/Svn38 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jonpcoombes


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Jonpcoombes/sandbox


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Cybersecurity and Infrastructure Security Agency

Evaluate the drafted changes
Note, this review is of an existing article, specific to the “Role” section.

Thank you for the opportunity to perform a peer review.

While the first paragraph did not have any changes, the second sentence in the first paragraph does not tie in well or is at least is a bit unclear.

The update develops the role well, including the addition of responsibilities. The details with chronological context are an essential addition to show how the role has evolved. It would be interesting to develop the role section further to show the fuller extent of CISA’s responsibilities, complemented by changes over time that take us to current. This historical detail could be added to the History section as well, however.

The selected references added to this section bind well to the content; the additions are from cisa.gov and dhs.gov.

There are a couple of minor comments on editing corrections. I believe the original document has a typo in the first paragraph or the Role section. Perhaps “which resorted until” should be “which reported until”. And lastly, the last sentence in the “Role” section should have “. “ removed from the middle of the sentence.