User:Jordansanicharan/Audio mixing (recorded music)/MatthewPulito Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jordansanicharan


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jordansanicharan/Audio_mixing_(recorded_music)?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Audio mixing (recorded music)
 * Audio mixing (recorded music)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: Jordan has added a new section to this Wikipedia page. His addition of the '' Room Acoustics" topic is relevant, and the lead that he provides for his section does a good job of introducing the sub-topic of audio-mixing. The first sentence of the lead introduces the topic well. Given the length of the total text, this lead does its job in defining what is to come in this sub-topic. The lead is concise, and the information that is provided is expanded upon in the body.

Content: The content of acoustic treatment is relevant to mixing audio. Perhaps Jordan could've gone into more detail about specific types of acoustic panelling. However, he does a good job of delivering important information in a concise manner.

Tone and balance: The content that is added here has a clear neutral tone. It is informative in nature; it is not saying anything more about room acoustics other than how they function, and how they fit into the topic of mixing audio. There is no bias or persuasion happening here.

Sources and References: Sources are added after nearly every sentence to back up the information. There are four total sources used, 3 are scholarly article, and 1 is from a blog. The blog is entirely dedicated to this topic, and the article that is cited is extremely dense, which gives it credibility. Sources are thorough and up-to-date, with the oldest one published in 2012. In general, the citing here is done well; there is no constructive feedback that I can provide for this section. Jordan cited a reasonable amount of sources given his article length, the sources are trustworthy, and they provide the proper information for this sub-topic.

Organization: Article is written in encyclopedic prose, with good diction. The syntax is decent, but could use some proofreading. Content is broken down into a lead, body, and conclusion section. Each section has a proper length. There are some grammatical errors; awkward sentences toward the end of the body paragraph. I suggest to proof read the article with a focus on sentence structure. If you find yourself stopping and having to think about a sentence, the syntax could probably be restructured. Also noticed a few areas that could use commas. For the most part, this is a well-written article, it just needs some more editing and proof-reading.

Images and media: The image that is provided is well captioned, and provides a better understanding of acoustic panelling. I notice that there is not any usage right under the photo. If the photo came from Jordan, then this concern can be ignored.

Overall impression: Jordan, this is a great addition to the topic of audio mixing. It provides streamlined information on how room acoustics would affect the mix of audio. There could be some more detail added on the topic, but that is really a subjective claim. This entry serves its function in providing relevant, neutral information. I would just suggest a proof-read of the article to pick up on some syntactical and punctuation errors. Other than that, great job.