User:Jordanshie/Free Breakfast for Children/RandomSTAY Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jordanshie


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jordanshie/Free_Breakfast_for_Children?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Free Breakfast for Children

Evaluate the drafted changes
Just looking at the original article, it is structured concisely and the flow seems to follow a timeline. Although it is a strong article already, there is information to be added. I would suggest adding more about where funding came from under the history section. Since you said you want to focus on the political environment of the movement, a relevant topic would be the anti-capitalistic values associated with the Free Breakfast for Children Program; specifically, you could explore where these values came from and how they were carried out in other aspects of the Black Panther Party. Finally, the legacy section is lacking in terms of the impact the Free Breakfast for Children Program had on the federal government's School Breakfast Program. You could expand on what is there by explaining the similarities in the programs, as well as why the federally funded program still has lasting impacts in comparison to the Black Panther party's program. As for the citations added, they are relevant and new sources, as well as credible. After reading through some of the article, I found that there is more information within those same articles that you could use. Although I don't suggest relying on a few sources, you have enough that you can reuse one or two of them to expand on what I suggested. If you are able to find new sources, even better! Good luck, and I hope this helped guide your additions!

RandomSTAY (talk) 19:23, 29 September 2021 (UTC)