User:Jordynederer/White feminism/Chloejoy5 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jordynederer


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jordynederer/White_feminism?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * White feminism

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Content:

Overall, I think the content is really well written and strong. I particularly like the inclusion in the first lead section. It is only a sentence, but it adds a lot to the content. That being said, I worry that the section on intersectionality and black feminist icons may not fit well in this article. The information is great and well researched, but I feel that it is going into a vein that does not fit under an article about white feminism. I know it is considered a negative term for the lack of inclusion, but I don't know if it is all relevant. Maybe include notable white feminists and their impacts and pitfalls to highlight the need for intersectionality without having a section dedicated to it.

I did like the inclusion of the years for the waves as it makes those heading more accessible for people reading it that may be less knowledgeable about feminism. Tone and Balance:

The tone is good and professional. It is well written and non-biased. I read it from a neural viewpoint and it came across in a educational, but factual manner. In the white feminism in the American legal system section just keep in mind to keep it non-bias because the nature of the section could allow it to easily fall into one viewpoint or another. Sources and References:

You have a great source, but more would be better as you only have one currently. Organization:

Well organized and matches formatting of preexisting article. Overall, what you ahem is well written and I think the point of view you're trying to add is really valuable and important. I think more information on white feminism and its downfalls may be more relevant, but it is your opinion on where you want to take this article.