User:Jorsilvari/Religion in South Africa/Danielasanchezsev Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

@Jorsilvari

Link to draft you're reviewing

 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jorsilvari/Religion_in_South_Africa?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

 * Religion in South Africa

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hello! Here's my peer review for you,

Lead
The lead has been updated to reflect the new content of contemporary religious values in South Africa. The lead also does include an introductory sentence concisely and clearly states, "The influence of religion is cemented in the community’s core value." The lead does not include a brief naming of the major sections such as religious values and religion and politics in South Africa. The lead does not include information that is not present in the article. The lead is concise, but could benefit from losing words such as "indisputable."

Content
The lead has been updated to reflect the new content of South African religion being a quintessential aspect of day-to-day living. The content updated is up-to-date, as it is from 2015 and 2020, however the content from 2005 may be outdated. Perhaps there is more content that can be added to the values section. This article does deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps, for it adds context to the religious nature of South Africa, but this could be strengthened by adding information on how religion affects politics and rule in South Africa. It addresses topics related to historically underrepresented groups such as Christians.

Tone and Balance
The content added is neutral, as it primarily focuses on describing the importance of religion to people in South Africa. There are no claims that seems to be bias to a particular position. There are no claims that seem to be overrepresented or underrepresented. The content added does not attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another.

Sources and References
All new content is backed up by reliable secondary sources of information from a Marius J. Nel, Dion A. Forster, and Christo H. Thesnaar book. Information also comes from a reputable case study from Johannes C. Erasmus. The content does accurately reflect what the cited sources say, as they outline the contextual evidence of the persecution Christian people had to face in South Africa and the effects this had on politics. The sources are thorough. The sources are current except the 2005 case study, but may still be accurate. The sources are not particularly written by a diverse spectrum of authors and do not include historically marginalized individuals. The sources are all great, as they come from credible JSTOR case studies and books. All links work.

Organization
The content added is well-written and easy to read, however could benefit from more content in general. The sections seem somewhat vague. The content added does not have any grammatical or spelling errors. The content added is well-organized. I would just add the more detailed effects of religion on the government and policy-making.

Images and Media
The article does not include images that enhance understanding of the topic.

Overall Impressions
The content added does improve the overall quality of the article. The strengths of the content added is that it provides more information on why religion is so important to individuals in South Africa. The content added can be improved by adding more direct information from religious people of the area. Also, adding more information on how religion first became popularized and how certain regions reacted to this. Perhaps it might also be beneficial to add more information on the specific changes that were happening in the government at the time at the cause of widespread Christianity.

- Daniela