User:Joseph.r.wollard/Marcos de Niza/WThiels Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Joseph.r.wollard


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Marcos de Niza


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
The neutral tone in the article is consistent throughout the article which is good. The content here is good as well. The biggest things I noticed were some locations and things that should have been linked to other wikipedia articles were missing their links. The other thing is the whole of the Background of the first expedition section. This whole part felt more like a overview of the expedition and not a background of events leading up to it. Maybe change the title or move some information around into new sections. Again the information there is good it just needs to be moved around and re named a bit. Overall pretty good.