User:JosephineHriscu/Esther Brandeau/SJFlood29 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

JosephineHriscu


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Esther Brandeau


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Esther Brandeau

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead:

The lead is short and to the point. When I am reading the lead of this article, I quickly get an idea of who I am reading an article about. The one critique I have about the lead is it is very short. I understand you are still working on your article but be sure to add more to the lead.

Content:

All of the content is relevant to your topic. I can tell you are in the beginning stages of forming your article and that is perfectly fine. It already has a good strong foundation and I can get a general sense of who Esther Brandeau is from what you have. This article does deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps discussing the Jewish faith. Just be careful and if you add more on her faith, and make sure it is neutral and fact based.

Tone and Balance:

The tone of the article is neutral. It is meant to inform and not persuade.

Sources and Reference:

Your sources are good. There are just a few tweaks you may want to address. On your fourth source, the website does not work. I get a 404 message on my end. I would double check that source. The other sources are in-depth novels; however, they are not easily accessible to the general public as they would have to buy these books. This may be okay, just consider adding information that is more publicly available.

Organization:

The content is very well written. Just from this short piece, I can get a strong sense of who Esther Brandeau was. My advice is to keep this same format and keep your same writing style, just add more detail to give your smaller sections some more information.

Images and Media:

There are no images within this piece yet. When you add images, make sure to follow all of the copyright rules and make sure they are well-captioned.

For New Articles Only:

This article does provide a strong array of outside sources. Within your draft, there are already many links to other Wikipedia articles so readers can learn more about this given topic. With your sources, just one thing you may consider, try to not add too many more articles from a Jewish source because this may have readers think this is a biased source. Your article is not biased at all, just be aware of that in the future.

Overall Impressions:

This article is off to a good start. I enjoy your style of writing. Just be sure to add more detail, add more images, and adjust your sources a bit and this article will come together.