User:Josh Hwang/Key Peninsula/Gjoe1973 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

@Josh Hwang


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Josh%20Hwang/Key_Peninsula?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Key_Peninsula

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Josh! Overall I would say your article is off to a good start, you have a decent amount of information pertaining to the area.

To being with your lead section I would move the information after the first sentence to a different section that pertains to urban landscape as the lead should describe the overall article in small detail. If you look at the article I edited this lead section to show an example of what you could use. Then I moved your second half of the lead to the subsection under geoography I titled urban areas.

All of yout content seems up to date but I would recommend searching for more sources when you flesh out your article to give it more support and validity.

In regards to the organization of the article I think you could add a few more sections to strengthen the article. I have added a few sub sections but I would suggest you include a brief section on the history of the KP as the inital article states "From the 1870s to the 1920s, transportation needs for communities on the western side of the Key Peninsula along Case Inlet were once served by a small flotilla of steamboats". I'm not sure if you would want to include this specifically but I would talk about how it was formd and what past uses of the KP have been and if there has been commercial activity in the past.

I saw that you did not include the image from the current article in your draft, I was wondering if you did this intentionally. Either way I think having a topographical image or map of the KP along with a photograph of the area could help strengthen the article and show the area. Even if it is a picture of purdy and the high school where they are mentioned.