User:Joshuapak11/Poverty and health in the United States/JG2027 Peer Review

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Joshuapak11
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Hi Joshua,

I throughout you did a great job keeping a neutral tone when explaining the different ways in which low-income people are at a disadvantage when it comes to medical attention. Throughout your article, you make many compelling additions that emphasize the pressing issue at hand.

I see that you did some restructuring, however I would go back and change the heading size to the appropriate one. The are some minimal mistakes when it comes to mechanics, however, your delivery on the intersectionality between the medical field and low-income persons greatly to the article.

There are very few instances in which I have concerns over language. I would say to pay attention to the adjectives that you use. For example: "As a result, despite finally qualifying for the insurance coverage, the underserved may still face challenges in accessing timely and appropriate medical care under Medicaid." I would try and remove the "finally" to make this more neutral. Once again, great work!