User:Josiesch/Exploitation of women in mass media/Eskarzinski Peer Review

General info
Josiesch
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Josiesch/Exploitation of women in mass media
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Exploitation of women in mass media

Evaluate the drafted changes
Is everything relevant?

I think the addition of the #MeToo movement information is very relevant to the present climate, given that exploitation of women in mass media is such a rooted and wide spread issue after having been around since media began and being linked to women's rights and gender role issues as well.

Is the article neutral?

I feel as though most of the additions read as neutral, except for the first line. I think without a citation, it reads as slightly biased and more narrative that factual. Wording could possibly stay the same with a relevant source. The last sentence in the third paragraph also reads slightly biased, but I may be missing that piece of information in the provided texts.

Representation of viewpoints

I think the addition of rape myths to the topic of exploitation of women in mass media is an important addition, but also know that it can be a dividing topic for some. I think in this case, aiming to keep as much neutrality in the words as possible is the best way to address all viewpoints that readers may have, while also educating them on pure facts of this complex discussion.

Sources

If possible, I think a link for the second source would be beneficial, but am aware that may not be available. I also think a citation for the definition of rape myths in the first sentence is needed, it leans toward a bias without a source. The first source added is very informative and provides a lot of additional insight to the topic.

Things to be added

Blurbs and citations for the music section additions are needed.