User:JovialCarrot/1970 Law on dangerousness and social rehabilitation/Banner18 Peer Review

General info
JovialCarrot
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:JovialCarrot/1970_Law_on_dangerousness_and_social_rehabilitation?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):1970 Law on dangerousness and social rehabilitation

Evaluate the drafted changes
I like the direction you're taking with the lead by adding important context (repeal date) and removing information that belongs in other sections of the article. Additionally, I agree with your idea that the sentences about the Law of Vagrants and Criminals should be removed from the lead section, but for the reason that there is nothing about the Law in any other section of article. For that same reason, you could consider adding a sentence that summarizes each subsection to the lead section. Overall, the sections that make up the article make sense, though some of the content could be altered. The last sentence of the "Punishments and Prosecution" section does not seem particularly relevant to the other content, and I would recommend either bridging the gap between these parts of the section or scrapping that sentence altogether. I agree with your assessment of the historical context section as potentially not necessary, though I would urge you to explore the option of expanding on the national and international context that led to the Law. The tone of the article and your changes to it are neutral and does not try to argue a certain perspective. The source you added to correct a date looks both relevant and legitimate. Overall, I think you're on a great track and I look forward to seeing where you take this article.

Sophie's Response
I think the lead section matches the article better now. I am worried that it is a little bare in comparison, so I might beef it up some more. I did try to add more about the context around the law, but more focusing on the law's impact than its precursors. Thanks!