User:JovialCarrot/1970 Law on dangerousness and social rehabilitation/Ricekrispyyy Peer Review

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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:JovialCarrot/1970 Law on dangerousness and social rehabilitation
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Lead: The box in the right hand side of the page that shows the dates of the Law's key dates has been made larger and moved to the top left of the page. This makes the dates easier to see. The sentences in the lead section are a bit wordy, though they are full of information. Overall, it is pretty similar to the original lead section with the exception of a few omitted sentences. In my opinion, this lead section focuses too much on information that relates this law to its predecessor. I think this information could be moved to the historical context section, and I think more sentences mapping out the structure of the article could be written here instead.

Content: The content here is all accurate, up to date, and relevant.

Tone and Balance: I think this article is written with a neutral and balanced tone. The one section I am kind of unsure about is the punishment section, which I think gives a good overview of its effects on terrorizing the queer Spanish community but I don't know if this would count as some kind of bias according to Wikipedia standards?

Sources and References: There is only one added reference so far. It is a direct link to the codified text of the Law. The source is current and accurately represented in the article.

Organization: I think the article is organized pretty clearly so far, though I wonder if giving historical information about the law before its punishment/prosecution would be more beneficial to readers to read in a chronological order? I think the part about García Lorca in the punishment/prosecution section also sounds a bit out of place.

Images and Media: I am not sure what the image of the Spanish Constitution adds to the understanding of the Law. I think maybe it would be more useful if more information was provided either in the text section or for image caption. The image is also near the very bottom of the article right now, so I think moving it higher would make it easier for people to see the image. I am not sure how to check if the image obeys Wikipedia copyright laws, but I trust that it does.

Sophie's Response:

I agree about the lead, and I think I changed it to be more focused on the actual article material. Yeah I agree the image is not the most useful but I think it puts some context around the importance of a new constitution. I will try to format it differently! I also have added more sources.