User:Joz27/Hélène Sparrow/Maddi Haraway Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Joz27


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Joz27/Hélène Sparrow
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Hélène Sparrow

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi! I don't see a sandbox draft or bibliography page corresponding to your assigned article. Did you maybe make edits directly to the article? After reading the current version of the article, I feel that it already contains a good amount of information about Hélène Sparrow that is neutral and has reliable sources to support it. The lead section is concise and reflects the article's major sections, so there isn't much to edit there. However, you could expand on the 'Early life' section since there is not much information besides the names of Sparrow's parents and where she attended school. Also, you could verify that sentences are associated with references. For example, there are several sentences in the 'Academic career' section that lack sources, so looking through the sources in the 'References' section to ensure that the information is actually supported would improve the quality of the article. Additionally, you could scan through the terminology used in the article to make sure that words relevant to the topic are linked to other Wikipedia articles, so readers can advance their understanding. Lastly, I suggest finding sources that discuss more about the vaccination programs in which Sparrow was involved, and this could potentially allow you to add sentences and make a new section apart from the 'Academic career' section. Overall, I think this article helps address content gaps in gender representation because Sparrow made significant contributions as a doctor and microbiologist to the prevention of deadly diseases. It's important to continue to revisit and revise this article to ensure that information about Sparrow's life and legacy are properly portrayed!