User:Jparada210/Positive behavior interventions and supports/Christiana Dalton Peer Review

Hi Christiana,

Thank you so much for reviewing my article related to PBIS implementation in schools. I appreciate your honest feedback and points you have made. I especially appreciate your suggestion of including Positive Behavior Support in Schools (PBSIS) instead of PBIS. I was honestly unaware that some schools referred to PBIS as PBSIS instead. I'm also glad that you made the point of evaluating the first sentence in the second paragraph. Reframing the sentence to state, "some schools use exclusionary discipline practices", does emphasize the idea that not every school implements a PBIS system or necessarily have the need to implement a positive behavior program in their school. Thank you for also providing a link with reference to more information about PBISIS. I truly appreciate your time and consideration. It was very helpful and insightful moving forward as I continue to edit my article.

Kind regards,

Julia Parada

Hi J,

Great work on the small edit for the PBIS article! I think it's important that you addressed the language in the lead section that could be interpreted as biased. Saying that PBIS “creates a positive school culture” is definitely a positive bias in support of the program; but Wikipedia should remain unbiased. I also thought that it was important that you pointed out that some parts of the article do not have citations attached to the claims written. It was also great how you included that the article overall remains neutral. I thought so as well after reading the other sections. Your small edit was useful and adds an important citation to verify the claims being made in this article. I liked how you also said that PBIS and SEL are some of the most “widely adopted” programs as opposed to saying that they are the most effective programs. Though there is research claiming that these programs are effective, I think it would be biased to claim that these programs are the best without having substantial research to back this up.

I do have a few suggestions for future edits of this article. One suggestion would be to change the wording of the first sentence of the second paragraph of the lead section. Instead of saying “In contrast to PBIS, many schools used exclusionary discipline practices including detentions, suspensions, or expulsions to separate students from the classroom and from peers,” it would be better to say that “some schools use exclusionary discipline practices.” I think this language is more precise because not every school is using PBIS and SEL as the basis for their behavioral management practices. I chose the word “use” instead of “used” because these management practices are still happening, and therefore we should be using the present tense to describe them.

Another suggestion I have is to expand the PBIS umbrella to PBSIS. Some schools use the newer term, PBSIS, to describe this behavior management system. I found an article from the USDOE that could be a useful reference for adding this minor edit as well. Here is the link: https://files.eric.ed.gov/fulltext/EJ1105721.pdf (Positive Behavior Support in Schools (PBSIS) - ERIC: U.S. Department of Education).

Great work on this article thus far. You have added important information and your questions are interesting and thought-provoking.

Take care,

Christiana Dalton

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