User:Jpeashoes/Orans/TreaBunny Peer Review

Lead:

 * The lead has not been updated to reflect the new content that was added, however, it appears as though only a small section of writing has been added to the "Depictions in Art" section so a change to the lead may not be necessary at this point. As we continue to edit and add to our changes it may be useful to go back and look at the lead to see if any changes need to be made. Otherwise, the lead that is on the original article is concise and clear, has a brief description of the article's major sections, and does not include information that is not present in the article.

Content:

 * The content concerning the differing opinions about the significance of females in the Orans pose in the early church is very relevant to the topic. This content seems to be up to date with the oldest resource being from 1998. At the moment, there does not appear to be any missing content or content that does not belong. With your additions, this article slightly deals with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps and addresses women in the early church, which is a historically underrepresented population and topic.

Tone and Balance:

 * The content that was added is neutral and does not appear to make any claims that are heavily biased toward a particular position. The added content actually fixes an area that was underrepresented by covering a different side of opinions about the female orans figures. The content added does not appear to persuade the reader to favor one position or away from another.

Organization:

 * The content that was added is clear, concise, and well-written. While your added content does not appear to have any grammatical or spelling errors, however, at the beginning of the second sentence of the paragraph you edited there appears to be a miss-type of the word "Other" in front of that sentence.

Overall Impressions:

 * While there has only been one sentence added to this article so far, it fits well with the information around it and blends seamlessly into the rest of the article on the Orans. My only critique would be that there need to be some more substantial edits to the article for me to provide any real helpful feedback.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jpeashoes


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jpeashoes/Orans?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Orans

Response
Hello, thanks for the help! I appreciate your comments. I definitely agree with the sentiment that there needs to be more substantial edits in order to provide some real change & information on the topic at hand. The "Other" typo has been deleted too. I'll make sure to keep in mind your critiques for the Lead section as I started to add more.